Some children spend hours every day on their Smartphone. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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progressing

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in technology and

accessing

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to the internet have facilitated

utilizing

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novel devices

such

as Smartphones or laptops

to

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all age groups. Among these, excessive use of

phones

by

children

has become a substantial problem in the world

that

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in

this

essay I will delve into the causes of

this

issue and explain its adverse effects. To commence with, I believe that parents and educational systems are to blame the most for the excessive use of cell

phones

by

children

.

In other words

, providing

such

devices from childhood by lenient parents in order to entertain their

children

and extracurricular applications that are designed for

children

have exaggerated their use of

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. To illustrate

this

, nowadays using

phones

in schools has become

epidemic

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, which was even illegal a few years ago at schools.

As a result

, exaggerating

this

phenomenon and hazardous consequences in the near future would not be unpredictable.

Although

using cell

phones

broaden

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children

’s horizons and acquainting them with the latest innovations all over the world, it would not compensate

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hazardous effects. By continuing

this

process,

children

will deliberately or by accident get accustomed to

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their valuable time and energy.

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, these days a large number of

children

spent

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hours

in

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playing apparently attractive games,

as

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a

result

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various physical and mental illnesses

would be

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inevitable

for

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them

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. In conclusion, I believe that convenient access to

the

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technology and the internet have accelerated

using

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the use of

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cell

phones

especially

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by

younger

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generation, which will cause irreparable

damages

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in their future life. To prevent the upcoming troubles, parents and governments could play a crucial role in addressing these issues.