More and more people are using computers and electric devices to access information, so there is no need for printed books, magazines and newspaper. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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electric media rather than traditional. So printing books and magazines are useless. I mostly agree with the
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. There are enormous causative factors
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my opinion and those are explained
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forthcoming paragraphs. On the one hand, people are getting more comfortable with modern methods. It has
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of advantages.
Firstly
, we are able to use it without
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barrier. If a person
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about a book or news, he or she can access the data with his fone at the moment.
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we can read the books at the place where we sit. If we are on a travel, we
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don't
need to carry a book with us. It helps us to reduce our luggage.
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had taken a book with me on my travels.
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I forgot to
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it with me so I couldn't read.
Secondly
, the writers can find more readers through the internet
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and they can earn more money. Because it is
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comparatively
cheaper than other. So individuals are getting more attracted
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reading.
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good for nature. On the other
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, printings have some advantages. To commence with
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habit, nowadays reading habit is getting low
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among
youngsters. Books are very good
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reading
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. Computer and mobile displays are not good for health, especially eyes. If a person
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more
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eyes. To
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,
although
modern methods of
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have
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of advantages, some
desadvantages
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disadvantages
.
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we can save our
time
and money
while
we use modern technology.
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  • Immediate access
  • Interactive content
  • Multimedia elements
  • Enriched learning experience
  • Environmental considerations
  • Deforestation
  • Pollution
  • Tactile experience
  • Cognitive understanding
  • Retention
  • Technological dependency
  • Power outages
  • Remote locations
  • Tangible form
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