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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagrams below show how houses can be protected in areas which are prone to flooding. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagrams below show how houses can be protected in areas which are prone to flooding. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The given diagram delineates the information regarding the method that can prevent the areas, which are at higher risk of flood, by using stopbanks. Looking from an
overall
 perspective, it is readily apparent that
stopbank
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a stopbank
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 helps to prevent the
area
 which is near the river or dam
to get
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from getting
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 drained in the flood.
Stopbank
 consist of freeboard, berm and floodgate. If the
area
have
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has
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the
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a
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stopbank
 as a barrier between the river and an
accomdation
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accommodation
 site near it,
this
prevent
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prevents
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 the water
to enter
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from entering
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in
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apply
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the housing sites. If the
level
 of 100-year flood
level
 is quite high,
however
,
due to
 the presence of
this
 technology, the water in housing colonies is quite low, which will prevent
from
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apply
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flooding.
In contrast
, if
stopbank
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a stopbank
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 is not present, the
level
 of water on the riverside is identical to the side of
land
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the land
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area
.
Therefore
 the houses needs to be more raised as compared to the house
of
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in
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 the
area
 that have stopbanks. The gap between
freeboard
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the freeboard
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 and
floor
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the floor
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level
 of
house
Add an article
the house
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 is only 30 mm.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words stopbank, area, level with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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