Some people believe that professionals such as doctors and engineers must work in the country where they were trained. Others think that they should have the right to work in another country if they wanted to. Discuss both of these points of view and express your own opinion.
In some
places
, professional Use synonyms
jobs
opportunities for Change the noun form
job
doctor
and engineers Fix the agreement mistake
doctors
are believe
to just Change the verb form
are believed
work
in Use synonyms
their
Change the word
the
countries
that they have been Use synonyms
training
, Replace the word
trained
however
, others think that Linking Words
working
opportunities should be Replace the word
work
open
up wider and are able to let them Wrong verb form
opened
work
in Use synonyms
other country
if they want to. In my opinion, I believe that they should be free to Change the wording
another country
other countries
work
at the Use synonyms
places
they wish for.
Working in the Use synonyms
places
Use synonyms
people
have been training, might Use synonyms
result
Use synonyms
as
higher efficiency Change preposition
in
while
working. For Linking Words
instant
, working as doctors in a hospital Replace the word
instance
that
Correct word choice
where
individuals
have been spending their time being Use synonyms
intern
may give better Fix the agreement mistake
interns
Use synonyms
result
Fix the agreement mistake
results
while
working, as they may feel less pressure and anxiety Linking Words
due to
how Linking Words
use
to the environment they are around Wrong verb form
used
while
training. Linking Words
Moreover
, working in some Linking Words
countries
or in the same Use synonyms
places
they have been trained, Use synonyms
are
like payback to Correct subject-verb agreement
is
its
own Correct pronoun usage
their
countries
. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, less population of Linking Words
peoples
are interested in being doctors and Fix the agreement mistake
people
engineer
, Fix the agreement mistake
engineers
due to
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its
difficulty Change the word
the
Linking Words
while
learning and Change preposition
of
long
period of learning time. Correct article usage
the long
As a
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result
, in many Use synonyms
Use synonyms
countries
those kinds of Add a comma
countries,
working
jobs lack Verb problem
apply
people
doing Use synonyms
it
.
Correct pronoun usage
them
In contrast
, giving Linking Words
people
chances to explore and Use synonyms
work
in different Use synonyms
countries
and Use synonyms
places
Use synonyms
help
them develop their skills and Correct subject-verb agreement
helps
give
them Correct subject-verb agreement
gives
wider
view of Add an article
a wider
working
aspect. Correct article usage
the working
Additionally
, Linking Words
individuals
get to meet new kinds of Use synonyms
people
and learn new things that they are not able to learn in their own Use synonyms
countries
and in the end, they can bring back those new educational and improve their Use synonyms
countries
. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, nowadays many Linking Words
countries
pay higher wages Use synonyms
Linking Words
then
Replace the word
than
its
own Correct pronoun usage
their
countries
Use synonyms
due to
how growing it is. Linking Words
For example
, America pays much higher wages being an engineer than those working in Thailand, since, Linking Words
people
in America Use synonyms
pays
higher taxes. Change the verb form
pay
Despite
, some Correct pronoun usage
Despite this
individuals
may prefer to Use synonyms
work
there and get paid better Use synonyms
and
Correct word choice
apply
while
enjoying new experiences.
Linking Words
To sum up
, working in the place Linking Words
people
have been training may Use synonyms
result
Use synonyms
better
as they have Change preposition
in better
less
worries Change the quantifier
fewer
due to
the used to Linking Words
of
the environment they areChange preposition
apply
,
Change preposition
in, moreover
moreover
, it Linking Words
also
helps pay back its Linking Words
countries
and help with the lack of jobs. Use synonyms
On the other hand
, working in different Linking Words
places
give Use synonyms
individuals
Use synonyms
wider
view of Correct article usage
a wider
working
aspect, Correct article usage
the working
Linking Words
furthermore
some Add a comma
furthermore,
countries
offer better wages and working lives.
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