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When students study a foreign language, they should also study the cultures and lifestyles of the people who speak the language. Do you agree or disagree?

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There is an ongoing debate among
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students
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students
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 should study both the
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. Some may argue that it is too much for children to learn cultural information
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, understanding how
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 in those countries live can significantly help
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 in exchange programs tend to
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 better than those learning it in the classroom.
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students
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 in exchange programs have a good understanding of the cultures and lifestyles of the
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 the right manner compared to
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 and cultural aspects, which is better than studying only the
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. In conclusion, I believe that
students
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task achievement
Make sure to address all parts of the prompt in your response. In this essay, you have provided a clear stance and supported it with examples, which is good. However, try to provide more specific examples to further enhance the relevance and depth of your argument.
coherence cohesion
Your essay shows a clear and logical structure with a well-developed introduction and conclusion. Your ideas are presented in a coherent manner. Just make sure to provide more support for your main points by providing more relevant examples and explanations.
lexical resource
Your use of vocabulary is generally effective and appropriate for the topic. However, try to vary your word choices and use more precise and specific language to further enhance your essay.
grammatical range
Your essay demonstrates a good control of grammar with only minor errors. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and use of verb tenses to ensure accurate language use.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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