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Band 2

People spend too much time on the internet. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #time #internet
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In my opinion , it
is depend
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 on
person
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sometime
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 people
are
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use
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 the
internet
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 so much and they have so many reasons to
use
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 it
.
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such
such
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 as how works in computer programming they are
using
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use
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internet
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the internet
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always
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apply
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because
his
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their
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works
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 and can lives in
a
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life .
However
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 majority of people
use
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 the
internet
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to
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in
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to
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 commutations with each other or see what is happening .
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 , l agree because in my life l saw so many people
they
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who
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use
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internet
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 and the community are
change
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. In anther side the
commucat
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other
face
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to
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face
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 is
decline
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 and they
will
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prefer
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to commucat
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commucat
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communicate
by
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via
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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 better to
face
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 to
face
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 it is not
glad
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easy
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 how
can
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apply
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they
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apply
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communicated
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together
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apply
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.
For
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example
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 when we were in 2020 , there
is
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 a vaures C-19 and we
can
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could
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 not
hung
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hang
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 out with
my
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our
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 friends and just stay in our
home
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homes
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that
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apply
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the
begging
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beginning
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 of
improve
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improving
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 the technology and traditional
of
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apply
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communication
in
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on
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internet
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 .
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Finally
Fainally
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Finally
, l agree they had been wrong
do
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • excessive
  • negatively affects
  • physical and mental health
  • decreased productivity
  • hinders personal growth
  • internet addiction
  • essential
  • numerous benefits
  • productive
  • educational
  • wisely
  • individual choice
  • responsibility
  • manage
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