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The plans show an office in a university in 2005 and the same office now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The
office
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 plans illustrate the
differantiation
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difference
of
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between
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 an
office
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 from 2005 to now.
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, the number and location of furniture changed significantly for
much
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 effective collaboration opportunities.
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, new appliances have
added
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 beside the entrance.
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, there was a room with
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a filling
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filling
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filing
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 cabinet and a desk
at
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apply
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the
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northwest of the
office
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 which has
been
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protected its original structure until now. The size of
main
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 room,
has
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located
at
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in
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 the southeast, has expanded
through
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by
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 removing the walls of
other
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the other
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 two rooms which are located
at
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 the northeast and southwest. Before the expansion of the main hall, the mentioned two rooms had desks and filing cabinets. After the expansion of the entrance room, previous desks gathered at the northwest of the
office
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, providing a spacious area for different activities.
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, new furniture, namely armchairs, noticeboards and sofa, has
added
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 at the
southewest
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southwest
south-west
 corner of the
office
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.
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, new appliances have included the
office
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 environment beside the entrance.
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