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The graphs below show unemployment rates and average earnings according to level of education. Summarize1 the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show unemployment rates and average earnings according to level of education. Summarize1 the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graphs depicted below
compares
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compare
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 the rates of
jobless
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the jobless
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 population in percentages and weekly salary of people
according to
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the
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their
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 education
level
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 in
dollars
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 for the year 2016.
Overall
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, the individuals who held a high school diploma were the ones with
highest
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the highest
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 unemployment rates and the graduate degree holders were counted for the least. The people holding the former stated
level
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 of education were paid the lowest sum
whereas
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 the latter ones topped the payment chart. In 2016, about 5.5 per cent of
the
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apply
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high school diploma holders were left behind unemployed counting for the highest rates in that year, with the least amount of weekly earning
that is
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 600 U.S.
Dollars
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. People with a college degree had a per week salary of 1100 U.S.
Dollars
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 and only 2.5 per cent of the total population with
this
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level
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 of qualification were jobless during that time. Only 1.2 per cent of the individuals who had completed a graduate degree in their careers were not having any jobs and the highest earnings in a week of 1,500 U.S.
Dollars
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 belonged to
this
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level
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 of education.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words level, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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