The graph below shows changes in young adult unemployment rates in England between 1993 and 2012.

The graph below shows changes in young adult unemployment rates in England between 1993 and 2012.
The line graph compares levels of
unemployment
among young people aged 16-24 with
overall
unemployment
figures over a
period
of 20 years in England.
It is clear that
the percentage of young
adults
who were unemployed at any time between 1993 and 2021 was considerably higher than the
overall
proportion of jobless
adults
.
Besides
,
Unemployment
rates for both groups of
adults
were consistently higher in London than in the rest of England. In 1993, the proportion of unemployed young
adults
in London started at 22%, after which it experienced a decline to 14% in 1999, before ending the
period
at 25% in 2012.
Similarly
, the
unemployment
rates
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of young
adults
of
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the rest of England was at 17% at the beginning of the
period
, followed by a decrease of 6% to reach the lowest point
at
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11% in 2001, after which it started to rise steadily to end the
period
at roughly 21%. The
unemployment
rate of
adults
living in London was 14% in 1993, with a subsequent dip to approximately 8% in 2001, after which it levelled off and began increasing to reach roughly 11% in the final year. Similar changes can be seen in the figures for unemployed English
adults
, which started the
period
at 10%,
then
reduced steadily to its lowest point at around 4% in 2004 before beginning to rise and
finally
ended the
period
at 8% in 2012.
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