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Some people think that in countries with high unemployment, the retirement age should be lowered to allow more young people to get jobs. What would be the advantages and disadvantages of doing this?

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When there is discussion on retirement, some
people
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 think that countries with high unemployment should lower the retirement
age
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 to give more opportunities to the young generation to get jobs.
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 statement has its own rewards and detriments. Both the merits
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 the upcoming write-ups. Discussing the gains, the foremost one is that, the new generations get opportunities to work and prove their capabilities and to showcase their skills, like when a young person gets a high-value job with powers, he/she may be good at understanding the new generation, so he/she could do the job with high potential and that person could influence many
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. Another benefit is that by reducing the retirement
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 the aged
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 could enjoy their life and they could live peacefully.
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, where there are advantages there are a few disadvantages
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, so when talking about disadvantages,
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, If the old and experienced enough
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 would retire at an early
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, there will be no one left to teach the younger generations, that how the system works and what to do and what not to. Adding to the cons, when
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 would retire at an early
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 they will be free and many
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 may not do any sort of activities,
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 would lead to spoilage of thoughts, as there is a saying that an empty mind is devil's mind.
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, we can say that, there are always two sides to a coin, so there are advantages and disadvantages with it. So the government should work
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 and find a neutral solution so that the younger generations get opportunities to work, and the old
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 don't get bored with life.
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