Working is taking a more important role in people's lives. Why are people working so much? Do you think this trend is good or bad?
Working is
integral
part of people's Change the article
an integral
lives
. They always try to get a good job and work
for years. this
essay will discuss this
topic in both opinions.
First of all, it is known that working takes part an important role in our lives
. even we choose and decide what will be our dream job from childhood. it takes several steps like begin
to Verb problem
going
schools
, Fix the agreement mistake
school
then
university and finally
graduation and work
will be waiting for us. we work
because we want to gain experience and earn money. Both men and women try to get the best offer for their job. when they work
they can get what they want. for example
, in
Change preposition
as
result
of working they can purchase different Add an article
the result
a result
metrials
Correct your spelling
materials
material
thing
which can make their life much better. like Fix the agreement mistake
things
car
, Fix the agreement mistake
cars
house
, clothes and several things like Fix the agreement mistake
houses
this
.
besides
of
Change preposition
apply
this
, people sometimes work
so much and it affects their lives
on negative sides. even though they get high
salary Add an article
a high
but
they can not spend time with their families. Correct word choice
apply
as
a result Capitalize word
As
first
they become exhausted and unhappy as well. we all know that Rephrase
apply
to be
rich does not make Change the verb form
being
everyon
thrilled. Correct your spelling
everyone
for example
, some families get divorced because of men's
working long hours. they claim that we can not spend time together and it Change noun form
men
makes
a lack of commitment between couples.
in conclusion, we know working is Verb problem
creates
main
part of our Add an article
the main
a main
lives
. in my opinion, if people make balance
between Add an article
a balance
the balance
work
and private life, it will make them on nine clouds.Submitted by arzu.shahbazova1 on
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