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The graph below gives information about car ownership in Britain from 1971-2007.

The graph below gives information about car ownership in Britain from 1971-2007.
The line graph illustrates the
number
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 of four different types of
ownership
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 (
Onecar
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one car
, No
car
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, Two
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car
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cars
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 and Three
cars
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) in Britain for 36 years from 1971 to 2007 . At the beginning of the period,
people
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 in Britain did not have any
cars
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, but
after
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this
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 period, the majority of
people
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 in the UK had one
car
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.
Moreover
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, the percentage of
people
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 who had two
cars
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 increased significantly,
while
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people
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 who had no
cars
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 dropped dramatically . With no
car
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 , it started at
highset
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highest
 point
at
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on
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line
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the line
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 chart in 1971, and it
then
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 drooped
at
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to
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 25
percentages
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per cent
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 in 2007 . After that, the
number
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 of
ownership
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car
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cars
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 in
britain
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Britain
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 increased , it started
line
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the line
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 of Tow
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car
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cars
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 at 8
percentages
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per cent
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 in 1971, and it stood at less than 30
percentages
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per cent
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 in 2007 .
On the other hand
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 , the
number
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 of
ownership
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 One
car
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 ,
it
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was
flachtuded
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fractured
, it
stsrted
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started
 and stood nearly at the same point between 40 to 50 from 1971 to 2007 .
Then
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, the
number
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 of
ownership
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 Three or more
cars
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 ,
it
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apply
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started at more than 1 in 1971
,
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and stood at less
10
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than 10
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 in 2007 .

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, ownership, car, cars, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • household
  • trend
  • fluctuate
  • increase
  • decrease
  • ownership
  • period
  • peak
  • dip
  • noteworthy
  • consistent
  • dramatic
  • highlight
  • significant
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