You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

In the current world, most of the hospitals have very expensive medical treatments. It is believed that
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such
services should be free of cost all over the world despite high-rated modern medical technology is not offered.
This
essay will discuss why having
such
free treatment is essential from the
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perspective. The first reason would be
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in its availability to less-income
family
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families
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. To give an example, most of
poor
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the poor
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class family not able to treat their small diseases because of high cost.
As a result
,
such
diseases take a dangerous form and
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it almost impossible to
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.
Furthermore
, it is proven that
majority
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of
people
do not have their health insurance.
Thus
,
people
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gets
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bankrupt
while
paying the huge bill from the hospital.
In addition
to
this
,
such
approaches from
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will encourage its citizen to pay their taxes.
For instance
,
government
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could use
this
tax income to pay the medical system to provide
such
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services.
As a result
, healthy
people
will
be
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more often contributing its
government
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the government
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and
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the country
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country
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economy.
Moreover
,
this
will bring equality in society where poor class
family
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families
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will be treated as same as upper class
family
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families
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.
As a result
,
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between poorer and richer will be reduced. To summarise, providing free access to
health
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system is
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in the right direction and very essential for the
overall
growth of
country
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the country
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. As
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such
step
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steps
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from the
government
will ensure universal health system access to its
people
and ensure social equality is maintained in the medical world.
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