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The picture below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

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The given floor plan delineates the information related to the change in the architecture of the museum during the time period between 1998 and 2008. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that, some new areas were opened in 2008,
as well as
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 the permanent
exhibition
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 space was abated. In 1998, in front of
main
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the main
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 entrance or exit, was the
garden
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area
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, which was located between the cafe and the entry gate.
However
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,
this
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 was changed in 2008, during which entry of the
garden
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 was decorated with some fountains and at the upper left corner,
cafe
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a cafe
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 sitting
area
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 was opened. Which was connected with the cafe. The
area
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 that was consumed by
shop
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the shop
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, WC and bags and coats room was shifted to
different
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a different
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 place since that
area
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 was utilised for the permanent
exhibition
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 rooms. The shop which was on the right
side
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 of the entrance during 1998, was shifted to the left
side
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 between the entrance and the bags and coats
area
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 in 2008. On the left
side
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 of the
garden
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,
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area
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the area
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 was consumed by the permanent
exhibition
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.
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However
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However,
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 in 2008, it was utilised for
differet
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different
 purposes
such
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 as
temporary
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a temporary
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exhibition
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 room, on
left
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the left
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side
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 of the
garden
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. On the top of
temporary
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the temporary
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exhibition
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area
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,
restaurant
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a restaurant
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 was opened.
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