All children should be made to wear school uniforms. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

I believe that
school
uniform is required to
wear
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while
in
school
and in any
school
program. Because it is important to maintain
to
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balance among
students
. There are
few
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a few
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reasons
on
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this
issues
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,
one
is if there is no specific
dress
to wear in
school
,
then
the problem that will
rise
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among
students
is that
one
can face negative remarks from their peers about wearing
dress
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a dress
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. For
an
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example, rich friends will wear dresses
those
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that
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are too brandy, and expensive,
where
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whereas
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other friends, those who are not able to buy brandy
dress
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dresses
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will get
bad
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a bad
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reaction from their friends. And,
this
kind of act will impact
on
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their mind. And
this
impact could lead to their family, which will cause more
problem
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problems
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.
For example
, if
one
student does not
has
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any earning source,
thus
they are not able to buy
dress
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a dress
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or any other things,
for
this
reason
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they are totally
depend
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on their own family income, if
one
's
students
family does not have
good
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a good
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income,
then
this
kind of demand to buy brandy
dress
will pressure on their family fund, which can be a disastrous choice for them. In terms of
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side
to maintain
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of maintaining
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dress
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the dress
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code
is
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, if
dress
decorum is maintained from
school
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the school
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level,
then
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an offical
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offical
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official
job they will not face any problems
to maintain
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maintaining
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wearing
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the wearing
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offcial
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official
dress
.
For example
, second day
in
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my first job, in
rainy
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the rainy
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season, I got wet by
rain
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the rain
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, and later I changed it in
office
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the office
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, but
on the other hand
,
on
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one
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of my
college
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could not do
this
, because he did not keep
alternative
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an alternative
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dress
. In conclusion,
school
dress
represents not only their identity but
also
keeps
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brotherhood
motherhood
among
students
.
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task response
Make sure to have a clear thesis statement that directly addresses the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement.
coherence cohesion
Ensure a clear and logical structure throughout the essay with well-developed paragraphs and appropriate linking devices.
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Expand your range of vocabulary by using more precise and varied words and phrases. Avoid repetition of words.
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Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar to avoid mistakes and improve overall clarity.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • school uniforms
  • sense of unity
  • equality
  • reduces distraction
  • peer pressure
  • easier identification
  • safety
  • professional attire
  • formal attire
  • financial burden
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