All children should be made to wear school uniforms. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I believe that
school
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uniform is required to
wear
Wrong verb form
be worn

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while
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in
school
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and in any
school
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program. Because it is important to maintain
to
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apply

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balance among
students
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. There are
few
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a few

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reasons
on
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for

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this
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issues
Fix the agreement mistake
issue

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,
one
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is if there is no specific
dress
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to wear in
school
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,
then
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the problem that will
rise
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arise

The word rise doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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among
students
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is that
one
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can face negative remarks from their peers about wearing
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dress
Add an article
a dress
the dress

The noun phrase dress seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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. For
an
Correct article usage
apply

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example, rich friends will wear dresses
those
Correct pronoun usage
that

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are too brandy, and expensive,
where
Correct word choice
whereas

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other friends, those who are not able to buy brandy
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dress
Fix the agreement mistake
dresses

It seems that dress may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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will get
bad
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a bad

The noun phrase bad reaction seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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reaction from their friends. And,
this
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kind of act will impact
on
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apply

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their mind. And
this
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impact could lead to their family, which will cause more
problem
Fix the agreement mistake
problems

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.
For example
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, if
one
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student does not
has
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have

It appears that the verb has is incorrectly used with the helping verb does. Consider changing it to the base form.

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any earning source,
thus
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they are not able to buy
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Use synonyms

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dress
Add an article
a dress
the dress

The noun phrase dress seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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or any other things,
for
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this
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reason
Add a comma
reason,

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase for this reason. Consider adding a comma.

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they are totally
depend
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dependent

The word depend doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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on their own family income, if
one
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's
students
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family does not have
good
Add an article
a good

The noun phrase good income seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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income,
then
Linking Words

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this
Linking Words

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kind of demand to buy brandy
dress
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will pressure on their family fund, which can be a disastrous choice for them. In terms of
positive
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the positive
a positive

The noun phrase positive side seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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side
to maintain
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of maintaining

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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Use synonyms

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dress
Correct article usage
the dress

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code
is
Unnecessary verb
apply

The verb is appears to be unnecessary here.

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, if
dress
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decorum is maintained from
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school
Correct article usage
the school

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level,
then
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I believe when they will do
Correct article usage
an offical
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offical
Correct your spelling
official

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job they will not face any problems
to maintain
Change the verb form
maintaining

To maintain doesn’t seem to work here.

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wearing
Correct article usage
the wearing

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offcial
Correct your spelling
official

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dress
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.
For example
Linking Words

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, second day
in
Change preposition
of

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my first job, in
rainy
Add an article
the rainy

The noun phrase rainy season seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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season, I got wet by
rain
Correct article usage
the rain

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, and later I changed it in
office
Correct article usage
the office

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, but
on the other hand
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,
on
Correct your spelling
one

The word on doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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of my
college
Replace the word
colleagues

The word college doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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could not do
this
Linking Words

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, because he did not keep
alternative
Correct article usage
an alternative

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dress
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. In conclusion,
school
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dress
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represents not only their identity but
also
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keeps
botherhood
Correct your spelling
brotherhood
motherhood

If you don’t want botherhood to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

among
students
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

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task response
Make sure to have a clear thesis statement that directly addresses the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement.
coherence cohesion
Ensure a clear and logical structure throughout the essay with well-developed paragraphs and appropriate linking devices.
lexical resource
Expand your range of vocabulary by using more precise and varied words and phrases. Avoid repetition of words.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar to avoid mistakes and improve overall clarity.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • school uniforms
  • sense of unity
  • equality
  • reduces distraction
  • peer pressure
  • easier identification
  • safety
  • professional attire
  • formal attire
  • financial burden
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