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Band 5

Governments should prioritize national interests over global cooperation to maintain their sovereign status. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The topic of whether
governments
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 should
prioritize
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 national
interests
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 over global
cooperation
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 to maintain their sovereign status is a complex one. In my opinion,
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 it is important for
governments
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 to protect their national
interests
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, I totally disagree and am of the opinion that they should not do so at the expense of global
cooperation
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.
To begin
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 with, there are a few causes why
governments
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 should pay more attention to global
interests
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.
Firstly
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, the international relationship has a significant effect on almost
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 of national development.
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 can be explained that we
recognize
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 that we live in an interconnected world, where
countries
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 are dependent on each other for various reasons
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 as trade, security, and environmental
issues
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.
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, it is essential for
countries
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 to cooperate with each other to address these
issues
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 effectively. If
countries
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’ authorities
prioritize
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 their national
interests
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 over global
cooperation
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, it can lead to conflicts and misunderstandings among
countries
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.
Secondly
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, global
cooperation
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 can lead to mutual benefits for all
countries
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 involved.
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, if
countries
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 work together to address climate change, it can lead to a healthier planet for everyone.
Similarly
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, if
countries
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 cooperate on trade
issues
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, it can lead to economic growth and prosperity for all.
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, in my point of view,
this
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 does not mean that
countries
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 should ignore their national
interests
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 altogether. It is important for
countries
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 to protect their sovereignty and ensure that their citizens' needs are met.
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,
this
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 should not be done at the expense of global
cooperation
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. In conclusion, I believe that
governments
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 should balance both priority in their national
interests
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 and global
cooperation
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.
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 it is important for
countries
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to
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 protect their sovereignty and ensure the well-being of their citizens, they should
also
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 work
together with
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 other
countries
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 to address global
issues
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 effectively.
This
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 will lead to a more peaceful and prosperous world for everyone.

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content and stance
Be clear on your view. Do not say you totally disagree and then say you want balance.
structure
Make one main idea per paragraph and start with a clear topic sentence.
coherence
Use short, smooth links to move from one idea to the next.
examples
Give one or two exact examples that fit the idea.
language
Check grammar and word form, fix errors like awkward phrases and long sentences.
lexical
Keep words simple; avoid hard words beyond top 100.
content
You have a clear aim that there must be balance.
content
You give ideas on how global work can help.
structure
The essay has a plan with intro, body and end.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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