Every year millions of people move from the countryside to the city putting increasing strain on the urban environment. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?
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the masses
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from rural Wrong verb form
have moved
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the
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area
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creates
imbalance
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an imbalance
the
city life.In my opinion, Correct article usage
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causes
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the causes
for
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of
this
situation
are lack
of opportunities in the area of Correct article usage
the lack
education
, job
and medical facilities. In the upcoming Fix the agreement mistake
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paragraphs
I would like to discuss causes Add a comma
paragraphs,
as well as
some solutions.
To begin
with, main
cause Add an article
the main
for
the migration from village to city is Change preposition
of
bad
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the bad
education
system. In rural areas primary schools
are good but the high schools
not
have Change the verb form
do not
did not
proper
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the proper
equipments
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types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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and teachers for better Correct your spelling
classes
education
.For instance
, in 1998, government
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the government
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scholarships
due to
the lack of equipments
in the rural Change the wording
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types of equipment
pieces of equipment
schools
student
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students
fail
to achieve the scholarship.
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failed
Secondly
, there are some solutions for this
situation
that are government should take initiatives to control this
situation
by providing opportunities to the rural teenagers in the field of education
.For example
, In 2002, higher authorities provide
laptops and computers to the students who Wrong verb form
provided
score
80% in their board exams. In Wrong verb form
scored
this
way
they directly Add a comma
way,
improving
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improve
situation
and appreciating
the adolescents to do better.
In conclusion, higher authorities should pay more attention towards the backward areas where Verb problem
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system is very low by taking accurate measures Add an article
the educational
such
as appointing more teachers , open
more Wrong verb form
opening
schools
and providing proper technology to meet the city things.Submitted by rupindergoraya54 on
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