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Band 5.5

The charts give information about employment in the UK in 1998 and 2012.

The charts give information about employment in the UK in 1998 and 2012.
The pie charts
represents
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represent
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emlpoyed
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employed
 people in the UK in 1998 and 2021.
Owerall
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Overall
, it is clear
tah
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that
number
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the number
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 of
employment
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employed
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men
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full
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full-time
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time
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 in 1988 was large
to compare
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compared
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 with 2012 with 6 persenges.
Meanwhile
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Meanwhile,
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 women
was
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were
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 less
emplyed
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employed
 in 1988 full-
time
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.
according to
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given
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the given
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 information
men
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part
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part-time
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time
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emplyment
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employment
 was less in 1988 in
comperison
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comparison
with
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to
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 2012. And the statistic shows that women worked more
part
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part-time
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time
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 in 1988. it is not
big
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a big
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gab
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gap
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, just 2 persentages. total numbers of
representativs
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representatives
 were 23,839 in 1988 and 29,600 in 2012. In
given
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the given
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number
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number,
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 it is
clear
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clearly
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 seen that women
Linking Words
last
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in last
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years
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year
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 have
full
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full-time
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time
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 work more
that
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than
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men
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. But
men
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started
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started to
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 work more work part-
time
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words men, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment rates
  • Workforce
  • Full-time employment
  • Part-time employment
  • Economic sectors
  • Technological advancements
  • Demographics
  • Unemployment
  • Labor market
  • Job creation
  • Economic growth
  • Gender disparity
  • Age cohort
  • Manufacturing sector
  • Service industry
  • Economic downturn
  • Government initiatives
  • Employment trends
  • Financial crisis
  • Economic policy
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