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Advertising is nowadays often targets children or products like fast food and toys. Many people believe this is bad for children and their families. Do you agree or disagree, give reasons with examples.

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Undoubtedly, commercials of fast
food
 outlets giving freebies have become
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 of controversy because one school of thought
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 that these advertisements have detrimental consequences. I am completely in favour of
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 notion.
This
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 examples. To commence with the most prominent reason, advertisements given by companies lure
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children to consume fast
food
 . The commercials proclaiming free toys with meals lead children to fast-
food
 outlets as they are
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exhilarated
 by the notion of receiving their favourite action figure.
For instance
,
Mcdonald's
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McDonald's
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 provide a little figure of their mascot ' Ronald' with their
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 meal.
Hence
, these figures become a source of pleasure for children and lure them to consume more
food
. Probing ahead,
ready to eat
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food
 items have low nutrition contents but ,these items are high in calories
therefore
, addiction
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such
 edibles
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 in increased unhealthy body fat.
Additionally
, indulgence in fast
food
invite
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ailemts
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ailments
 like obesity, high blood
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pressure
 and heart issues
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etcetera
. To exemplify, in developed nations residents thrive solely or mostly on fast
food
 items and the results manifest in
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the fact
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 that these
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 make up for the largest chunk of obese and unfit individuals.
Hence
, addictive fast
food
 should be shunned. To
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recapitulate
, owing to the
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aforementioned
 reasons and examples it can be concluded that fast
food
 has annihilating effects
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,
such
 promotions should be disallowed by authorities with immediate effect.
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