You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you're interested in the tour. • Ask for information about dates and prices. • Express your concerns about your fitness level. You do not need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam, You should write at least 150 words.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing

this

letter with regard to the brochure advertisement for a walking tour in the Rishikesh mountains. I believe,

such

travel opportunities do not come often and as a person who likes to explore the different parts of the world, it is a good chance.

This

tour will allow me to connect with the natural beauty of these mountains and their scenery.

In addition

this

tour will help me with my college assignment which includes the study of different mountains and landscapes. Another thing is, I was not able to find any

further

details on

this

trip. I would appreciate it if you could provide me with dates when

this

trip is scheduled and the cost associated with it. I would

also

like to inform you of my recent accident which caused a fracture to my left hand. I would like to know if

this

trip has any stage which concerns

this

fitness issue for me. I am worried about

this

problem in terms of my fitness level. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours Faithfully, Kunj Soni

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

185 words

8.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

7.5

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

7.5

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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