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Air travel is preferred by the rich people only.Majority of the peope receive no benefit from the development of air travel as an industry. Do you agree or disagree?

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advent
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 of technology, the
travel
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 time to any place around the globe has been minimised by
the
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means of air
travel
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. It is often regarded for the wealthy individuals only, leaving behind a huge chunk of
population
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the population
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 unable to benefit themselves by the means of
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 commodity. I completely disagree with the
above stated
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 notion. Expenditure required to swiftly
running
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 the intricate air network ,
as well as
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the skeptical
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skeptical
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sceptical
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 nature of most populace in terms of spending
money
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 will prove
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.
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as
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modern technology has boosted growth in every sector, particularly the
travel
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 sector. It is now faster than ever and all eyes are concentrated on the
flight
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 industry.Since millions of dollars are needed to erect a single aeroplane
,
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 and even more capital is needed in maintaining it
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 the personnel linked to it like highly salaried pilots, a hefty amount of
flight
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 attendants,
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a large operating ground unit. All because of
this
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 a decent sum of
money
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 is needed for travelling in an air carrier. To target the majority of the population, new cheaper
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 companies have emerged providing a downgraded version of a business plane with
same
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the same
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 quality of services.
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introduction
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 of
new
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a new
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 organisation like Indigo in India, whose main motto is to provide the cheapest tickets
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around 10 million Indians
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travel
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through
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 their airplanes in the first launch year.
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, most
of
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citizens are always looking for an
oppurtunity
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opportunity
 to narrow down their
travel
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 costs to a minimum. Particularly the elder generation
keep
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money
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 above their valuable time
hence
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 refrain themselves by travelling on a train or bus. Clearly, it can be inferred that the populace itself is not letting themselves be
apart
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 of
this
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fastly growing
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fast-growing
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 sector all remarks to their skeptical nature.
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,
according to
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wide
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 survey, when asked most of the individuals
eventhough
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even though
 had enough capital to
travel
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 by
flight
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, chose using trains or buses to reach
the
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their
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 respective
destination
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. As it is way cheaper than the former mode of
travel
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and
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it is crucial for them
for being
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 able to save even a single penny.
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, the
flight
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 industry is expanding exponentially and it will continue to broaden
it's
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its
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 horizon. More and more corporations are still working towards bridging the gap between rich and poor to make it
accesible
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accessible
 for everyone. It's the
individuals
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 choice to choose either
money
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 or their priceless time. The

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