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Task 1: The plans below show how the ground of a particular building has changed over time. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

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The pictures given demonstrate the transformation of the ground floor from 1958 to the present.
Overall
, it can be seen that the ground floor has been used for 3 purposes namely
office
, apartment, and flower shop. The amount of room has been reduced over time. From 1958 to 2000, the meeting room of the
office
 was replaced and expanded by the living room of the apartment. The secretary's
office
 and toilet in the southwest have been removed for the bathroom and shower of the apartment. In the northeast, the kitchen remains unchanged. The
manager
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office
 and reception area have been converted into 2 bedrooms. From 1985 to 2001, in the northwest, the living has been turned into a place to sell gift cards. The bathroom and shower were removed for the play area. Both gift cards and the play area are reduced to have space for the flowers.
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Ensure that all the main features are mentioned in the summary.
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