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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram illustrates a project for the development of the southwest wing of an
airport
.
Overall
, it is apparent that the
airport
 will have a size augmentation
as well as
 the creation of new features in order to accommodate departing and arriving passengers. Looking at the maps more in detail, the position of the doors
of
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for
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 departures and arrival will remain the same but two more doors will be added.
Additionally
, the
airport
 has currently only eight gates. The project would add ten more gates at the top of the
airport
, changing the shape of the entire wing.
This
 augmentation
also
 means that the passengers will have access
two
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to two
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 sky trains in order to facilitate the accessibility to the different departure gates. The
airport
 will
also
 see the addition of different features
such
 as a check-in counter and bag drop at departure, before passport and security check. When arriving,
travelers
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travellers
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 will have access to a new café. There will
also
 be an ATM and car hire. The placement of the
last
 service reshapes the east wall of the arrival section.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • terminal
  • runway
  • refurbishment
  • redevelopment
  • amenities
  • car park
  • hangar
  • concourse
  • public transport hub
  • access roads
  • boarding gates
  • check-in desk
  • baggage claim
  • departure lounge
  • observation deck
  • duty-free shopping
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