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Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

#people #difficulties #lack
Recently ,it is undeniable everyone around the whole world
have
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 difficulties
in sleep
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sleeping
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 at night, in
this
 essay we will present the causes of
this
casse
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crisis
and how can avoid it.
They
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 are several factors to
get
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unenough
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enough
 rest at night,
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 ; most people
have overthinking
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 during the day
for
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about
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thier
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their
lives and
responsiblites
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responsibilities
, even In simplest things.
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; the students before the day of
exam
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the exam
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 they become imagine how
difficulties
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 of it, and how will be
being
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.
Secondly
; presence more
cafifine
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caffeine
 in the body that caused by employees
drink
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drinking
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 a lot of coffee at the office to remain focused and
also
 eating junk- food
instead
 of Healthy one.
Finally
,
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 duties
such
 as condolence and celebration ,
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 will lead to
narrow
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 the night
therefore
 there is no time to have
along
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long
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 sleep.
Conversely
;
they
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there
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 are
solution
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to tackle
this
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your
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time of
the
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apply
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day and
healthy
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a healthy
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 lifestyle by
doing
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exercise or
dance
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dancing
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,
further more
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furthermore
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,you can take a holiday or a
tip
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trip
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 in
natural
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 area with family or someone
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who love
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love
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loves
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 to obtain
freash
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fresh
 air and
pstive
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positive
 energy.
In addition
 before sleep, get
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a
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cold shower And play relaxing music or Holly Quran to avoid
a
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apply
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negative and overthinking. In conclusion ;every
problems
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problem
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have
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has
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a solutions
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a solution
solutions
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, So difficulties
to sleep
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sleeping
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 can be released by exercise ,
good
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a good
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 lifestyle ,remain relaxation
as
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apply
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you can.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Insomnia
  • Sleep deprivation
  • Sleep disorders
  • Sleep quality
  • Fatigue
  • Exhaustion
  • Restless
  • Restorative sleep
  • REM sleep
  • Circadian rhythm
  • Sleep hygiene
  • Napping
  • Sleep duration
  • Melatonin
  • Sleep-inducing
  • Drowsiness
  • Sleep disturbances
  • Obstructive sleep apnea
  • Snoring
  • Sleepwalking
  • Sleep talking
  • Shift work
  • Sleeping pills
  • Sleep aid
  • Relaxation techniques
  • Meditation
  • Deep breathing
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