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You want to learn a language. A teacher who teaches this language lives near the area where you live. Write a letter to the teacher. In your letter, say how you came to know about him/her explain why you want to learn this language ask what help he/she can offer

#language #teacher #lives #area #offer
Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Islam and
i
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 am from Uzbekistan. I recently won a green card and came with my family to America forever. I
want
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want to
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 learn
English
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the English
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 language.
However
, I do not know anything here, so I asked the locals. Local people
said
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asked
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 what are you the best teacher in the town and
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 gave your email address.
Firstly
,
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 will live here forever so I have to learn to speak
English
 fluently.
Secondly
, I have been interested in
English
 for a long time.
Besides
, I want to work here, and everyone here is
English
, because of
this
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 I wish to learn
English
. I do not know where to start. I wanted to ask you. Where do you suggest I start
.
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 I would appreciate it if you could send the details to my email. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours Faithfully, David Beckham.
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greeting and closing
Make sure to address the teacher by their proper title and name. For example, if you know the teacher's name is Mr. Smith, start with 'Dear Mr. Smith,'.
logical structure
Each paragraph should focus on one main idea or topic. Consider breaking your letter into paragraphs to make it more structured and easier to read.
task achievement
Add more specific details about why you are interested in learning English and how it will benefit you, such as career opportunities or social integration.
grammatical range
Review your grammar and punctuation to improve the overall clarity and coherence of your letter.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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