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You are going to visit the town where your friend went to university. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, explain why you will be visiting the town give details of where you will be staying ask your friend to recommend some evening entertainment

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Dear Adam How are you? How is your study? How are your family members? I hope you are okay. The
last
 time we spoke, I mentioned that I wanted to visit your city.
Then
 I thought I could not go there. But my aspiration has come true and on
business
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 I will visit your city in the coming days. A meeting of students of our faculty will take place soon and I am the organizer of the engagement. I remember you told me that your city has many historical and modern places. I really need your help with choosing a place for a party and an overnight stay.
Besides
 you, I have no friends in
this
 area. I hope that my request will not inconvenience you too much. I look forward to hearing from you! Yours faithfully, Mia Parker
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task response
Make sure to address all the points mentioned in the prompt, such as explaining why you will be visiting the town and asking for recommendations for evening entertainment.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas into clear and separate paragraphs, with each paragraph focusing on a single idea or topic.
lexical resource
Expand your range of vocabulary and use more diverse and specific words and phrases to express your ideas.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar to ensure clear and accurate communication.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • I am writing to inform you that
  • I am excited to announce that
  • I have decided to visit the town where you went to university because
  • I have always been curious about the town, and I thought it would be a great opportunity to explore it
  • I have booked a room at a hotel called
  • I will be staying in the town from
  • I am wondering if you could recommend any
  • fun activities
  • entertainment options
  • popular places to visit
  • restaurants
  • bars
  • clubs
  • concert venues
  • I am particularly interested in
  • local live music performances
  • cultural events
  • art galleries
  • theater shows
  • I would greatly appreciate your suggestions
  • Thank you in advance for your help
  • I am looking forward to hearing from you
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