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In many countries, people wear more western-style clothes (suits and jeans) than their traditional clothes. What is the reason for this? Is it a positive or negative development?

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In
this
 contemporary era, wearing
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western-style
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 dresses is an ongoing trend in numerous nations. There are several reasons behind
this
 phenomenon,
however
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 the main culprit is the cultural shift
due to
 the internet.
Accordingly
,
this
 issue might have a detrimental impact on the traditional identity of many people. To embark on, globalization constructs a bridge between individuals from different cultural backgrounds
,
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 and leads to infusion of these cultures.
In other words
,
due to
 the
internet
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 the world has become a small village where many people can share and spread their traditions globally, and
this
 includes
clothes
.
As a result
, and
due to
 the fast-paced lifestyle that requires a comfortable type of uniform, which is a characteristic feature of western dresses, and the increasing availability of
this
 type of
clothes
 online a plethora of workers tend to buy and wear it in
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favor of their conventional costumes.
For example
, Iraqi traditional
clothes
 consist of multiple layers and could restrain individuals' mobility in their work environment.
Therefore
, many employees around the globe have a tendency to purchase comfortable
western
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clothes
 that facilitate their movements without being trapped in the traditional ones.
Nevertheless
, despite the aforementioned point, it can still be claimed that conventional suits are considered to be an important portion of individuals' identities. To illustrate, conservative customs have been inherited from one generation to another,
thus
it
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forms
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 an integral component of a country's history,
as well as
, culture.
Therefore
, losing it might negatively affect
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that nation because a significant part of its history might be amputated. Eventually, a gradual fade of that culture might occur in the long-term future.
This
 can be exemplified by an article conducted by a group of Iraqi civil society activists that assumed only one-third of the Iraqi traditional styles
has
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 remained in
this
 age,
while
 the majority has disappeared
along with
 its relative culture across ages.
This
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after
this
 essay has reiterated the above-mentioned points, it can
assume
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 that
although
 the comfortable
western
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 customs have
particularly
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 designated to suit the current style of living,
it
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 may indirectly assist in the gradual diminishing of numerous
cultural
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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