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describe a graph that shows average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, globalisers and non-globalisers.

describe a graph that shows average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, globalisers and non-globalisers.
#growth #products #countries #globalisers #non-globalisers
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The given bar chart illustrates data on the average development of yearly
dosmestic
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domestic
product
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products
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 in developed, developing,
underdeveloped
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and underdeveloped
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countries
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 from
1960s
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 to
1990s
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the 1990s
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. It shows that there
were
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was
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a decreased
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decreased
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of
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growth
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 in developed
countries
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, increased and fluctuated of
growth
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 in developing and underdeveloped
countries
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 respectively.
As the
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 presented bar chart
,
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 starts with wealthy
countries
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. In
1960s
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the 1960s
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 there
were
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was
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 approximately 4.7% of average GDP
growth
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 which is the highest
growth
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 throughout other states. The
numbert
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numbers
number
 kept decreasing and reached 2% in
1990s
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the 1990s
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. In
globaliser
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globalised
 states, there
were
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was
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 about 1.2% of GDP in the first 10 years of recorded data which
were
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was
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 the lowest amount of
growth
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 throughout 40 years. The number kept increasing and reached 5% of
growth
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 in
1990s
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the 1990s
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. In
non-globaliser
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non-globalised
non-globalized
countries
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, 2.2% of
growth
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 in
1960s
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the 1960s
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. The amount
were
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fluctuated and reached 3.1% in
1970s
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the 1970s
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 which is the highest
growth
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 in these
state
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states
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 throughout 40 years. After that, the number
were
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decreased and reached 1.2% in
1990s
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the 1990s
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, growth with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • domestic products
  • wealthy countries
  • globalisers
  • non-globalisers
  • average growth
  • graph
  • trends
  • economies
  • advanced technology
  • globalization
  • global trade
  • integration
  • slow growth rate
  • participation
  • economic growth
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