Many people believe that today there is a general increase in anti-social behavior and lack of respect for others. What might have caused this situation? How to improve it?

It is widely recognized that anti-social and disrespectful

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in today’s civilization

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on

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rise. For

this

matter

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I believe that

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an individualistic

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lifestyle,

as a result

of capital oriented

society

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is the cause

thus

an awareness

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mental health has to be raised.

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with, nowadays, industrial countries are on

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rise and every country is in a race to be an economic giant.

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to that, cultures that are built around

this

kind of global movement are based on the dream of capitalism in which everyone focuses their attention

to gain

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more capital

while

diminishing the values of

solidarism

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solidarity

, friendship, and family. We can see

this

instance around our education system that in many schools where

childrens

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children

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are forced to study more than 8 hours will leave no time for them to play, socialize or have quality time with their families for the sake of

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grade

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which

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can secure their chance to get a good job in the future.

This

in turn will nurture the grown man and woman

that is

socially reluctant and will voluntarily put away their social values for economic gain. In response to that, we have to raise the voices about mental health at the level of society to

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awareness on the issue of the sickening individualistic lifestyle that harasses our psychological nature to care for others.

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this

awareness will encourage a wide range of actions to target

this

problem

such

as in Indonesia where the new minister of education erased the national exam from a requirement of high-school graduation because of the data showing that successful people are not the smartest, but the most sensitive to the needs of other people.

This

kind of data is what we need as a discourse that opens the eyes of many people to care for others. In

summary

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it's the civilization that over-valuing the capital will discredit the social aspect of our culture.

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in the long run can ruin

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society as every person lives a lonely life.

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the discourse of mental health has to be raised to remind us that we are not alone.