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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railwaw lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There are many arguments for spending capital on improving
public
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the public
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 mood of
transport
, some individuals
belive
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believe
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 that it is better to focus on new very fast trains railway but others think that we have to
investing
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invest
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on
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in
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 public one
that is
 existed. I
personaly
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personally
 think the best way to
improving
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improve
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 public
transport
 is
try
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to try
trying
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 to find ways to use money in
right
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the right
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 way.
Firstly
,
economical
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the economical
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 aspect to
focuse
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focusing
 on public
transport
 is we can spend less money but in a very effective
way
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way,
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 that means more
improvment
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improvement
improvements
 will
accure
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occur
 with
same
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the same
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 amount of budget.
In addition
,
bulding
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building
new
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a new
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 railway
need to make
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requires making
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 some changes in
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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 that will
effect
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affect
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 on
society
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society's
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enviroment
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environment
also
may
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apply
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cause some unpredictable dangers to new users like
flood
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floods
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.
Lastly
, most of the men and women used to use
this
 old generation
transport
 to have them daily journies like
family
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a family
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 trip or
bussiness
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business
 one to name a few, due
this
 fact it is hard for them to change their mood of
transport
. In conclusion, the new railway may be too faster or too comfortable but with
same
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 budget we can see greater
improvment
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improvement
 in
old
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the old
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 public
transport
 which is
exsicteing
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exciting
 now in several aspects like comfort, speed, greenhouse gas emission
in addition
 to ease of use.
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Grammatical Range
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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