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Public transportation could be made free of charge.Are there more advantages or disadvantages to this change.

#transportation #charge #change
There is an ongoing debate among
people
 regarding
to
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the benefits of free public
transportation
. From my perspective, I believe that
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funding
the
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public
transportation
 could
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 more advantages than
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drawbacks. On the one hand, if
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public
transportation
 were supported by the
gorvernment
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government
, there would be more citizens who get beneficial outcomes from easily
access
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transportation
.
In addition
, there are many positive reasons
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 attracting more
people
 to use public
transportation
.
For example
, it can
reduces
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 the number of personal car usage which leads to
reduction
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 in traffic problems
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therefore
people
 can have more time to
allcate
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allocate
 in their life.
Nevertheless
, there are some
advantage
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 in reducing
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road accidents since
people
 can trust
in
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their professional drivers.
On the other hand
, many
people
 believe that
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having free public
transportation
 could
leads
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 to many problems since the budget that
funded
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 in
this
 project was from the taxes. It means
this
 budget could have more benefit if they use it for
adressing
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addressing
 other health or educational problems which seem to have a huge impact on the society rather than the
transportation
. In conclusion, there are both pros and cons
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 having free public
transportation
.
However
, there are more beneficial outcomes
such
 as easily
acess
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accessing
transportation
 can give
the
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people
 more time to
ise
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travel
 and reduced road accidents ,compared to the arguments about funded allocation.
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