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The graph below shows the average closing prices of selected precious metals from 2013 to 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average closing prices of selected precious metals from 2013 to 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the mediocre closing values for chosen valuable metals between 2013 and 2021.
Overall
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, Despite the fact that palladium was the cheapest metal at the beginning, after a
while
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, it increased dramatically.
As a result
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, it became the most expensive one among all the categories.
Although
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 the starting of platinium was at its peak value, it lost its cost remarkably over the years. Primarily, Palladium was the most inexpensive metal, by approximately 750 dollars in 2013. By the following year, its value had only slightly increased compared to the previous year.
Moreover
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, metal decreased between 2014 and 2016 to approximately 500 dollars.
However
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, it reached its valley, which was
also
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 related to all the other three categories.
Furthermore
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, in the next five years, the value of palladium peaked at around 2500.
Additionally
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, That peak was
also
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 related to the other two types. The platinum was at its peak in 2013 by approximately 1500. In a year, there hadn't been many changes.
However
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, it slightly decreased.
Furthermore
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, there had been a notable decrease at around 1000. Eventually, that metal's price increased above 1000.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, furthermore, however".
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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