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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed , rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantage of being self- employed?

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people
choose
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 to be self-employed
working
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rather than to work for someone in companies. Many choose
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 for several reasons and
feel
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 more
independence
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. I strongly support
people
 who show willingness
for working
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 as self-employed. In
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 it will be discussed about advantages and disadvantages of
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 issue. To commence with, it should be considered that there
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 no official rules and security for self-employed.
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people
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the
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work late and there is no punishment system for them.
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result
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, it may lead
some
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 lack of
dicipline
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discipline
whereas
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people
 will lose their work ability.
Moreover
, it concludes with either
unsuccessfull
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unsuccessful
 results or demotivated workers' sadness.
In addition
, there are several benefits of
self-employed
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being self-employed
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 like work-life balance and creating both
nice
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 and cosy environment for working.
people
 can choose their working hours
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it
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will make flexibility for them.
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, they can arrange working hours and
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result
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 they can spend time with family and other activities. improving motivation is the most important aspect of
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. in conclusion, nowadays working as self-employed is ranging up from simple business
till
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to
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 huge companies. In my opinion, it has as many
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positive
 effects
for
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people
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  • autonomy
  • entrepreneur
  • independence
  • opportunity
  • financial stability
  • set your own schedule
  • pursue your dreams
  • take risks
  • uncertainty
  • income stability
  • workload
  • taxes
  • marketing
  • client acquisition
  • job security
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