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Admittedly, the pros attached to buying
items
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on
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Internet
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the Internet

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are define
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. First and foremost, when buying on the
Internet
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by digital gadget,
people
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make better shopping choices. Shopee perfectly exemplifies
this
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situation,
this
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social media has provided a wide range of
Items
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such
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as clothes,
gadgets
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… since 2010.
While
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in the past,
people
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spent a huge amount of time
on
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shopping directly, today, with the
befenits
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benefits

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of marketing and advertising
campains
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campaigns

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,
people
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have more choices on
the
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social networks. Apart from providing various
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, buying
Items
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on
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Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

Internet
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the Internet

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creates a range of job opportunities for many
people
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. In the past,
a
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apply

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millions of
people
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would have to face unemployment, now, buying
items
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on
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Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

Internet
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the Internet

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has a severe impact on their
live
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lives

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and makes significant financial contributions to the development of
nation
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the nation
a nation

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Notwithstanding the aforementioned benefits associated with buying
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on
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Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

Internet
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the Internet

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, I am convinced that they are eclipsed by the following
drawback
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drawbacks

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. Buying
Items
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on
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Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

Internet
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the Internet

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lead
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leads

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many
people
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become
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to become

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more
heavlily
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heavily

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reliant on
the
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technical advances.
According to
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VNexpress, most
of
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people
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in Hanoi is a good case in point, they spend too much time on
smartphone
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their smartphone

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instead
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of interacting
face to face
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face-to-face

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with others.
Besides
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, technological advances in communication could lead to social scamming. Many
people
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experience feelings of
deceiving
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deception

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when realizing that online shops have many
items
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in
virtual
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the virtual
a virtual

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world,
while
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in the real
world
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world,

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there is no item
which
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that

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people
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can buy. In conclusion,
while
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it may be justifiable
for buying
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to buy

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Items
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on
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Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

Internet
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the Internet

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has more benefits, I believe that buying
Items
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have
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has

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potential risks and
lead
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leads

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to depending on technical gadgets

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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