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your english speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. write an email to your friend. in your e-mail. recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn. explain how your friend could learn sport. suggest that you both learn this sport together

#english #friend #lives #town #advice #sport #email #e-mail
Hi Mike, I hope you are doing well. Today I remembered that you asked me
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new sport to learn. I thought about it and
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 research to come up with the best sport that can fit your needs. I know that you are looking for a sport that
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you can have fun and get fit as well. I got your back
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 brother. I know that you are into martial arts and I believe
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BJJ
 can cover both of your needs. In
Toronto
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 there are
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many
beginner friendly
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bjj
 dojos where they have weekly courses. For most of the
dojos
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 you do not need to make any online registration. Basically, just google
bjj
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 Toronto and you will see
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 of
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BJJ
 locations. Pick
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 of them and check their schedule to be there on
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time. Next week
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, I will be free after
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work. We can go there together if you would like to. I was thinking of restarting, so
this
 can be a great opportunity for me to make my life more active. Let me know brother what you think, best
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