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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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sexes during the span of three years,
that is
 from 2011 to 2014 at Burnaby Public Library. The values are expressed in thousands.
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 females were more interested in book reading than males. The books read by men rose significantly over the course of the timeline
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 readings by women steadily inclined in the
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initial
 years before crashing down by the end. In 2011, around 3,000 books were read by men,
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 the value
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 marginally to 4,000 by the next year. The number of readings shot up to 10,000 books in the next twelve months and the numerals continued to rise
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 14,000 by the end of the timeline.
Womens
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on the other hand
 read approximately 5,000 textbooks,
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 the value inclined steadily to 10,000 readings by the fall of 2013. The numbers plummeted
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drastically to around 7,000 by 2014.
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