“The Growth of online shopping will one-day load to all shops in towns and cities closing “Do you agree or disagree.

There is a huge demand
of
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e-tailing around the globe
due to
the electronic service
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in favour of people's energy and time. But it
also
has another negative side effect. One of them
,
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end
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of the existence of all marketplaces,
shops
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and shops
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in urban areas. I totally disagree with
this
evidence, as far as many
shop
centers
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have to function as a storage and for other needs. It is
a
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common knowledge that, stocking remotely is not always reliable.
For instance
, the delivered clothes might not suit well on your body
, so
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that
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you return the product.
Consequently
, it is better to visit
this
shop
,
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and try it on yourself by saving your resources and time.
Moreover
,
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the fact that there is a sudden increase in online stocking, shops are used for goods
storages
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and for marketing area. Scam is
very
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popular type of crime. So
accroding
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according
to
this
, in order to leave positive impressions on
particular
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the particular
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company and check on fairness, it is essential for customers to have
a
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trust by seeing the process of work of employers live.
For example
, if
i
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want to buy some stuff remotely,
i
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need to be sure that
i
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will not be tricked by anonymous,
also
i
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will check on comments and recommendations
this
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shop
.
Shop
centers
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have to compose as
existence
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of
company
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. In
21st
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century, customers might be wrong with choosing sizes and during the delivery of stuff, goods might be broken, in order to not
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on
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you
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time
consume
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and money, shops have always
exist
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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