Some poeple say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this?

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era, it is really important to keep our
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neat and clean. It is the responsibility of every individual to keep
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things in well
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with, keeping our
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and workplace neat and clean is really an important aspect of our lifestyle. It helps us to live free from the various bacteria and micro-organisms
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substance easily. To elaborate, undoubtedly if our
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is clean properly human beings feel
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, the employees will stay away from any disorder
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the organisation.
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, if humans
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organise
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place
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they can find out
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easily with less wastage of time.
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if
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properly cleaned and well
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they will feel jubilant.
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it is really important to identify the proper
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and store them where an individual can find
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easily.
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, if the living
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and job
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messy it
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difficult for an employee or a human to
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and
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there because if our
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is dirty there are many chances to feel ill from there because there are
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of enzymes and bacteria living there and cause any diseases to any people. To explicate, if humans our not
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there
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items
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proper
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they will find difficulties
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out
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home
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or in
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and it will waste our time and money.
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to
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or live there.
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work
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place
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is
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not well organised properly people will feel disappointed or
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.
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it should be
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of every
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to keep
there
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home
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and
work
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area tidy and
well
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organise
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for others Conclusion
keeping
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our
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work
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area well
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organise
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it
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helps
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feel fresh and
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humans
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from any illness in
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and it is
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of every
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people
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the topic and presents supporting arguments or examples.
Coherence and Cohesion
Include a clear introduction where you state your position and a conclusion that summarizes your main points and restates your opinion.
Lexical Resource
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Grammatical Range
Focus on improving sentence structure to reduce errors and improve clarity.

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Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tidy
  • organised
  • correct place
  • sense of order
  • calmness
  • promote
  • enhance
  • productivity
  • efficiency
  • accidents
  • safety
  • locate
  • clutter-free
  • stress
  • mental well-being
  • professionalism
  • impression
  • cleaning
  • organizing
  • dust
  • dirt
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