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You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter, 1. Explain why you think you would be suitable for the job. 2. Say what else you could do for the family. 3. Give your reasons for wanting the job.

#advertisement #couple #australia #someone #two #children #language #year #job
Dear sir ‏ I am
cross
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 over your advertisement
on
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 the local newspaper
this
 morning looking for someone to teach your children the Italian language . I am writing to you to request for
this
 job I was
teaching
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a teaching
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 assistant at university for a
while
 after graduation so I have experience
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method
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 and proceeders of teaching and learning
and
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also
i
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 am
Italianan
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Italian
. I see it is not difficult to
learning
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 my
origin
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 language
In
addition
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 I can take care of your children when you are at
office
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 .
moreover
, I inherited
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 cooking skills from my grandmother who is an Italian chef So
i
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 will be able to teach you how
cook
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the
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Italian cuisine ,especially
the
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pasta .
Finally
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 I am requesting
to
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you to
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 accept my request to be able to fun
fo
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 my
master
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 graduate program and I hope to emphasise
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my situation looking forward to your
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response
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Sincerlly
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Sincerely
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea and use linking words to connect the ideas logically.
coherence cohesion
Include a proper greeting and closing in the letter.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary to enhance the lexical resource.
grammatical range
Pay attention to grammar and sentence structure to improve the grammatical range.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • TESOL certification
  • Experience in teaching children
  • Knowledge of Australian culture
  • Passion for language education
  • Flexible and adaptable
  • Design customized lesson plans
  • Patient and understanding
  • Strong communication skills
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Participate in family activities
  • Enthusiasm for cultural exchange
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