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Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. SOme people consider it a good idea, but some people oppose it. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Many individuals dispute the amount of using
aircraft
 to
transport
fruit
 and
vegetables
 to countries where drought or out of season. I totally disagree with
this
 statement and I will discuss my point of view.
Aircraft
 developed by state-of-the-art techniques,
which
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also
 bring a lot of advantages and disadvantages to our lives. First of all, using
aircraft
 to
transport
food
 to other countries can be easier than using other
transport
 stations.
Due to
 containing
food
 in
aircraft
 will always make
food
 in good condition, we can deliver various types of
fruit
 of
vegetables
 to some countries where can’t grow because of their typical atmosphere or weather. We can contain a high amount of
fruit
 of
vegetables
 by a large storage of the
aircraft
 which can provide enough
food
 for people.
Although
 the benefits it bring to our life, it
also
 has a disadvantage. The time of delivering
fruit
 or
vegetables
 can be delayed all the time by the bad conditions of weather like hurricanes, or tornados.
This
 problem will decrease the quality of
vegetables
 which can be spoiled easily in a short time if it doesn’t stored in standard condition. The important that using
aircraft
 to
transport
 can cost money to deliver.
Therefore
, many people will definitely choose another way which costs less than it. I support the idea that we can use another way to
transport
vegetables
 or
fruit
.
Due to
 the big and risky problem it brings, I decided to choose another way. Not many people can afford the high price when the flight package is delayed. It was
also
 difficult to make a bill or order by
aircraft
. We need to have enough knowledge to know what will bring benefits to our
life
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.
To conclude
, using
aircraft
 to
transport
 will
also
 bring two sides of advantages,
aircraft
also
 have good condition and storage to contain a large amount of
vegetables
.

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