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Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today´s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is good to know the
history
.
However
, some
people
 argue that STEM subjects are more important than
history
. In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss both views which is
history
 most important or STEM subjects are more important. To
starts
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 with,
History
 is
a
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 important topic in school. We know about
any things
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 through
history
. It let us know about different problems and it is being solved.
Mistake
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 of
people
 can
be learn
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 through it.
In addition
, how
people
 confront
with
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different problems.
However
, different
people
has
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 different interests. Some
student
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 may like STEM subjects. They don't find
history
 interesting. For those folks, learning
history
 is like a burden. In every matter, there is a learning opportunity. I think it should be optional. Those who
wants
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 to learn it
,
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 can choose it
otherwise
 they won't go for it.
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