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To prevent overpopulation, the state should pass laws to limit the number of children per family. Do you agree?

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At the present time,
for
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 avoid overcrowding, the authority should have
proved
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provided
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a regulations
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regulations
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.
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,
this
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agree
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to
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that
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government
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the government
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 provide regulation for specific
areas
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 and
campaign
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campaigns
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 about parenting to young families. The
government
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 provide regulation for controlling birth order.
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, there are several policies for authorities.
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, growing and
applicating
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database
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 for specific
areas
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base
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from
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 economic background, locations, and
healthy
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 background.
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, there are
being
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related resources for classification. The
second,
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establish and enforce rules in remote
areas
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 and metropolitan
areas
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 and all
of
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stockholder
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are following
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 the roles.
However
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, individuals
has
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 controlled the progress from regulator to citizens.
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, some places in Indonesia,
such
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 as Java
island
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 is overcrowding,
base
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from
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 data
static
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apply
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institution so the authority making rules
urbanization
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for urbanization
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to
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in
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 rural
areas
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, like Papua
island
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.
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, lack of
analyzes
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data
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of data
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 for birth order and
campaign
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campaigns
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to
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for
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 young families about parenting for
individulas
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individuals
.
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, the
government
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 should educate individuals who
wants
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 and after
married
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marriage
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 about child management for
education
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the education
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,
healthy
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, and personality of children. In fact,
at
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in
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 society are
being
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increased
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an increased
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 number of
parenting lack
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parents
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.
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, the local
government
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 in Papua periodically educate their citizen
for
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consult to
healthy
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the healthy
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 care center.
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, there are a high education background should have been to
behavior
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 and knowledge. In conclusion,
this
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 statement has
been
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negative
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a negative
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impacts
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impact
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for
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 families number.
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, that will impact for birth rate in
development
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developing
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 and
develop
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developing
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 countries.

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