To prevent overpopulation, the state should pass laws to limit the number of children per family. Do you agree?

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avoid overcrowding, the authority should have
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a regulations
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.
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government
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provide regulation for specific
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and
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about parenting to young families. The
government
provide regulation for controlling birth order.
Moreover
, there are several policies for authorities.
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, growing and
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economic background, locations, and
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background.
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related resources for classification. The
second,
establish and enforce rules in remote
areas
and metropolitan
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and all
of
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stockholder
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the roles.
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, individuals
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controlled the progress from regulator to citizens.
For instance
, some places in Indonesia,
such
as Java
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is overcrowding,
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institution so the authority making rules
urbanization
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to
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rural
areas
, like Papua
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.
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, lack of
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data
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for birth order and
campaign
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young families about parenting for
individulas
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individuals
.
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, the
government
should educate individuals who
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and after
married
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about child management for
education
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,
healthy
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, and personality of children. In fact,
at
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society are
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increased
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number of
parenting lack
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.
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, the local
government
in Papua periodically educate their citizen
for
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consult to
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care center.
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, there are a high education background should have been to
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and knowledge. In conclusion,
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for
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families number.
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, that will impact for birth rate in
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and
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countries.
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