To prevent overpopulation, the state should pass laws to limit the number of children per family. Do you agree?
At the present time,
for
avoid overcrowding, the authority should have Change preposition
to
proved
Verb problem
provided
a regulations
. Correct the article-noun agreement
regulations
a regulation
Overall
, this
essay will discuss the debate, and give a concluding view about fully agree
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agreeing
to
Change preposition
that
government
provide regulation for specific Correct article usage
the government
areas
and campaign
about parenting to young families.
The Fix the agreement mistake
campaigns
government
provide regulation for controlling birth order. Moreover
, there are several policies for authorities. Firstly
, growing and applicating
Verb problem
applying
database
for specific Fix the agreement mistake
databases
areas
base
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based
from
economic background, locations, and Change preposition
on
healthy
background. Replace the word
health
Furthermore
, there are being
related resources for classification. The Unnecessary verb
apply
second,
establish and enforce rules in remote areas
and metropolitan areas
and all of
Change preposition
apply
stockholder
Fix the agreement mistake
stockholders
are following
the roles. Wrong verb form
follow
However
, individuals has
controlled the progress from regulator to citizens. Change the verb form
have
For instance
, some places in Indonesia, such
as Java island
is overcrowding, Capitalize word
Island
base
Replace the word
based
from
data Change preposition
on
static
institution so the authority making rules Correct word choice
apply
urbanization
Change preposition
for urbanization
to
rural Change preposition
in
areas
, like Papua island
.
Capitalize word
Island
On the other hand
, lack of analyzes
Replace the word
analysis
data
for birth order and Change preposition
of data
campaign
Fix the agreement mistake
campaigns
to
young families about parenting for Change preposition
for
individulas
. Correct your spelling
individuals
Moreover
, the government
should educate individuals who wants
and after Change the verb form
want
married
about child management for Replace the word
marriage
education
, Correct article usage
the education
healthy
, and personality of children. In fact, Replace the word
health
at
society are Change preposition
in
being
Wrong verb form
is
increased
number of Correct article usage
an increased
parenting lack
. Replace the word
parents
For example
, the local government
in Papua periodically educate their citizen for
consult to Change preposition
apply
healthy
care center. Add an article
the healthy
a healthy
Thus
, there are a high education background should have been to behavior
and knowledge.
In conclusion, Change the spelling
behaviour
this
statement has been
Verb problem
had
negative
Correct article usage
a negative
impacts
Fix the agreement mistake
impact
for
families number. Change preposition
on
However
, that will impact for birth rate in development
and Replace the word
developing
develop
countries.Wrong verb form
developing
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