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Traffic and housing problems in major cities can be solved by moving large companies, factories, and their employees to the countryside. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

#traffic #cities #companies #factories #employees #countryside
Some
people
 believe that if corporations, industries, and their workers relocate to the countryside traffic and accommodation issues will be solved. I completely disagree with
this
 statement for some reasons that I will discuss in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, the countryside usually is a place that draws
people
 for its beautiful nature and clear air without pollution. so,
this
 area will be pit if ruin it by moving factories there.
moreover
,
people
 who work there would waste their precious time
while
 commuting to their workplace.
Furthermore
, in an emergency situation, if the patient lives in the countryside, a lot of time will take to reach the hospital and workers refuse to stay in the outskirts because they think it is dangerous to travel at night.
Finally
, animals who live there will suffer from the contaminants that will be produced.
In addition
, the government must educate folks to utilize public transportation rather than private vehicles,
therefore
 there would be less number of vehicles on the road. Plus, authorities should provide a wide range of transportation. So, it would cause less traffic, and individuals could benefit from more time at home to do their personal activities.
For example
, in China, the government equipped cities with numerous types of underground, buses, trains, cable cars, and so on to move
people
 from one place to another.
To sum up
, the main idea
that is
 written in the question isn’t efficient enough and it will lead to arising of new problems. The state plays a crucial role
to deal
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in dealing
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 with
this
 issue.
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Ensure that all parts of the essay prompt are addressed and provide a clear position on the given statement.
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