The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast-food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

The chart below shows how frequently people in

the USA ate in fast-food restaurants between

2003 and 2013.
The following chart represents how frequently individuals in the USA, consumed fast
food
during the years 2003 to 2013. As a whole, the percentage of people eating
this
kind of
food
every day or not at all is less than 5, throughout the years. The highest consumption of
this
kind of
food
is once a week in all years, and its peak
is
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was
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in 2006
with
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at
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more than 30
percent
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per cent
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. The number of people eating fast
food
once a week, once or twice a month is approximately equal
with
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to
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about 30
percent
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per cent
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.
Additionally
, 15
percent
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per cent
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of individuals
eat
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ate
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a few times a year in 2006 and 2013. The highest proportion of
crowd
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the crowd
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, who had several times a week belongs to the year 2006, with 20
percent
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per cent
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. 17 and 16
percents
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percent
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of people
have eaten
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ate
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as
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at
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aforementioned
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the aforementioned
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times, in 2003, and 2013 respectively. The apex of rates in 2013, goes back to
consumption
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the consumption
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of fast
food
once or twice a month.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words food, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fast-food consumption
  • frequently
  • economic downturn
  • age demographics
  • lifestyles
  • health consciousness
  • advertising campaigns
  • affordable dining
  • healthier alternatives
  • consumer habits
  • proliferation
  • trend analysis
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