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The Contribution of Various Economic Sectors to country Gross Domestic Product in 2016, 2017 and 2018

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The table provides information about the Economic sectors in the different three products agriculture , industry and service around three years .
overall
, the highest rate in 2016 was service,
whereas
 the lowest rate was agriculture .
Moreover
 , the industry increased in 2018 ,
while
 service decreased in the same year . the details illustrate that assistance was the highest one in 2016 ,at 65% ,
although
 cultivation was the lowest one in the same period about 13% .
however
, the percentage of industry was 22% .After one year , the manufacturer raised by 25% .
while
 the highest product was dropped by 64 % . even that husbandry fell by 11% . but in 2018 ,
it is clear that
 the percentage of employees was 55% .
on the contrary
, the proportion of workmanship was 30% .
In addition
 to that , the rate of farming was 15% .
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