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In many societies, there is a growing emphasis on sustainable living and reducing environmental impact. What are the challenges of adopting a sustainable lifestyle? What practical actions can individuals take to contribute to sustainability?

Sustainable development has been a debate over
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 decades.
Moreover
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, there is a current trend in many parts of the world that sustainable living should be encouraged so impacts on
environment
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 can be minimized.
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 I believe there are several difficulties
of
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 adopting a sustainable lifestyle, measures can be taken to address these issues.
To begin
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 with, adopting
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a sustainable
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 lifestyle might face challenges
due to
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multitude
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 of reasons.
Firstly
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, alternative replacements might be unavailable or cost a great deal to switch from traditional methods to sustainable ones.
For instance
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, burning fossil fuels are causing
pollutions
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pollution
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, which poses a threat to
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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.
However
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,
people
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 still find them more affordable rather than harnessing solar or wind power.
Secondly
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, it is relatively troublesome to break the old habit of waste disposal in an irresponsible way.
This
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 problem takes place possibly
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 the lack of education for children in undeveloped countries. Several measures can be taken to encourage
people
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 to live responsibly and sustainably. In
short
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 term, a high tax should be imposed on gas to discourage
people
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 from using their private vehicles and
therefore
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switch
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switching
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 to alternative energy. In
long
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the long
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 term,
infrastructure
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the infrastructure
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 of
mode
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the mode
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 of electric public transport should be put into
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practice
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.
In addition
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, environmental bodies and
government
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governments
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 must cooperate in launching propaganda to raise awareness of how to classify waste and how plastic products damage the habitat of all beings.
As a consequence
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, all of
aforementioned
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the aforementioned
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 measures can contribute to sustainability by reducing
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 tremendous amount of waste in general released into
environment
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the environment
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. In conclusion,
people
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 might face hardships
to develop
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in developing
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a
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apply
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sustainable
habit
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habits
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.
However
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, a number of methods can be introduced to promote sustainable development and soften impacts on living
habitat
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habitats
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.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main point and supports it with relevant examples or evidence.
task achievement
Include a more detailed and specific example in the paragraph about waste disposal.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary throughout the essay, particularly in discussing alternative energy sources and waste management.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar to ensure accuracy and clarity.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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