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Many governments think that economic progress is the most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Disscuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Economic
progress
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 is prioritized by many governments
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 a group of people think that other
types
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 of
progress
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 are as important as economic
progress
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. I agree with the thinking of the governments. Economic
progress
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 is the key factor for
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development
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the development
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 of a
country
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. It is impossible to start different developmental programs without achieving economic upliftment. The
country
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 which
want
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 to see
themselves
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itself
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in
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on
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 the road of
progress
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they
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apply
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must improve
their
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its
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 economic situation. The GDP, GNP, Per capita income etc. all are connected with economic inclinement. As a matter of fact, We can
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 Bangladesh as an example. Here,
the
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structural
development
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 is seen everywhere but there is a lack of economic
progress
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 so
that
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It's losing reserve money and taking loans from different international
development
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 organizations under certain rules and regulations. So, all
types
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 of
progress
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 are not very good
factor
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 but the growth in
economic
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the economic
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 sector is.
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, It will be possible to do other kinds of
development
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 If the economic
development
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 is steady.
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, a fragile economy can not play a vital role in any sector of.improvement.
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, If other
types
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 of
progress
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 are prioritized like economic
development
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, the economy will face a decline as It won't get the priority It should get.
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,
economy
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the economy
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 is
the
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 major part of
development
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. If the economic situation is about to fall, nobody or no other
country
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 will be eager to give a loan for improvement as there is a risk
this
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 big amount will be repaid later. In conclusion, I want to stand with the thinking of many governments as I get that the whole
development
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 of a
country
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 depends on
the
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good economic achievement and situation.
In Addition
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, other
types
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 of
progress
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 are directly connected with it.
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