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Band 6.5

The two maps below show the village of Bunborough in the present day and plans for the village in 2024.

The two maps below show the village of Bunborough in the present day and plans for the village in 2024.
The maps represent information about the present and the future
plane
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plan
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will
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that will
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 be
renovated
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to renovate
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in
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apply
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2024
of
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in
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 the village called Farmshire.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the city will be constructing
the
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apply
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three main things
are
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a shopping Centre,a community football field and employment assistance.
To begin
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 with,
the
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in the
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town
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in
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at
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the
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apply
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present, there have village shop near to the road and is in the south of the farmshire. Next,there have woods area in the north of the
town
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 and beside the farmhouses. For future development,the
town
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 will have employment assistance ,and they will remove the
town
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 store.
In addition
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, they will be cutting
woods place
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wood places
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 and they will be building a community of football. And the big change in 2024 will be a big supermarket. So, the city will be developing more facilities because they will be changed into a big
town
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 ,and they need people who live in the province to have a good life.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • maps
  • village
  • present day
  • plans
  • 2024
  • overview
  • key differences
  • road network
  • infrastructure
  • residential areas
  • recreational spaces
  • impact
  • environment
  • benefits
  • challenges
  • proposed changes
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