Influence of human beings on the world's ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of bio-diversity. What are the primary causes of loss of bio-diversity? What solutions can you suggest?
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of
human beings is enormous.The primary Change preposition
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problems
have arisen as a result
of this
,there are some solutions
One of the first problems
of the human actions
is pollution
.For example
,many fabrics are
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pollution
is a major issue. Many industries dump wastes
into rivers, lakes, ponds, and streams in an attempt to hide Fix the agreement mistake
waste
wastes
from inspectors. These water sources feed major crops and food becomes contaminated with a variety of chemicals and bacteria, causing rampant health Fix the agreement mistake
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a negative
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a negative affect
negative affects
affects
on the planet.Another major problem is Correct your spelling
effects
an
illegal haunting.These days,there are constant news stories about Correct article usage
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an illegal hunters
and killed animals,resulting Correct the article-noun agreement
illegal hunters
an illegal hunter
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in
is
a possible extinction of animal species which Correct your spelling
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affect
on Correct subject-verb agreement
affects
bio resources
It’s important,that action is taken to combat these Correct your spelling
bioresources
problems
.Governments should to
tighten the law and introduce more controls for the haunting.Big companies should support special organisations that work to protect animals.It can be a way to make a positive impact Fix the infinitive
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bio diversity
.To solve Correct your spelling
biodiversity
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the
pollution
problem,people should start from themselves. The easiest ways
to solution for air Fix the agreement mistake
way
pollution
is to move away from fossil fuels, replacing them with alternative energies like solar, wind and geothermal.Also
governments should check the companies and fabrics more properly.
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To conclude
,the influence of human beings on the planet is awful and people
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people's
actions
kill the planet everyday
,but these Replace the word
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problems
have a solution.However
,with the right actions
by the government and the public educating about the importance of preserving wildlife and negative
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