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Planting trees is very important for the environment. Some people say that the government should take responsibility for planting trees while others opine that it is the responsibility of the citizens to plant trees in their houses. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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There are controversial perspectives heating debate over the the fact of reforestation.A segment of society
reckon
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 that it is
duty
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the duty
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 of authorities to plant forests,
however
,others opine that it is
obligation
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the obligation
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 of locals to maintain
trees
.
This
 essay will
eloborate
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elaborate
 both these narratives and I will discuss my perception in conclusion. The first perspective that narratives that the responsibility of planting
trees
 should be
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the main
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 concern of regimes .
According to
this
 doctrine,as authorities have command
on
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 taxes,
as a result
, they should put
theirs
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focal point efforts
to make
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into making
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habit
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habits
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 eco-friendly.
Additionally
, they should
also
 instruct locals by organising various events over the matter of awareness of CO2 emission which is produced
due to
consumption
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the consumption
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 of fuels which causes global warming,
green house
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greenhouse
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 effect
as well as
 soil erosion.
For instance
,it has
observed
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 that in America,the amount of CO2
enlarging
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 gradually .
Examing
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 the latter view, proponents argue that the locals are responsible
of
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for
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 maintaining
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the forest
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forest
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forests
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, as
this
 is
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their
thier
 social right.As a matter of fact ,the core idealogy behind supporting
this
 idea is government are
also
 responsible for other aspects
such
 as providing free education
,
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and taking steps towards
economy
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 betterment.
In contrast
,citizens should take steps by own
thier
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their
 own
selfs
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selves
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,
in other words
,
instead
 of using
thier
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their
 own cars they should use public transport.
Morever
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Moreover
,they should
also
 take care of
trees
 that are on
bank
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the bank
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 side of roads ,by providing water and other important nutrients to them
as well
as
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and
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 they should
also
 plant
trees
 in
thier
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their
 homes.
For instance
,
according to
 recent research,
which
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apply
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 states
that
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apply
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the habitat cannot become eco-friendly without
having
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the struggles of citizens towards
this
 issue.
To conclude
, both stances have their own feasibility and merits,I believe that administrations are less responsible because they have other major concerns.
Therefore
, citizens should consider
thier
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their
vital priority to maintain forests to prevent surrounding form pollutants.
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